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Introduction text should be improved
Compare these two titles and the second one should read better. The first text has the following problems:
- Dates are written as either
23 August
orAugust 23rd
with the latter being the more correct version. - There is no such thing as "23th" (thirdth?) - it's "23rd". See https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ordinal_number_(linguistics) for a complete list of ordinal suffixes.
- Text fragment "some things that doesn't work yet" is incorrect syntax. The correct syntax is "some things that don't work yet" because "things" is plural.
- Arguable: "Present you XYZ" or "Present to you XYZ" can be argued. I guess either way is fine but I'd personally use "present to you XYZ" when talking about an inanimate thing.
The suggestion also trims down the sentences a bit to make them read more like a native English speaker.
Edited by namelesscoder